Reviewing a Classmate's blog: Ally Hansen

http://journalism1ah.blogspot.com/2016/10/recordings-and-how-it-effects-us.html
  Ally Hanses has many positives and negatives within her writing. The paragraphs did a very good job dividing the information and her opinions. There are 4 paragraphs all with their own purpose: one is an opener, one for technology, one that ties everything together, and one for her opinions. But, the sentences are a little choppy and the vocabulary is not very high. Most sentences aren't very complex and that is something I would fix as well as fixing the vocabulary level. I did think Ally presented the information in a way that makes me know she understands what she is writing about and I enjoyed reading her blog.